How do you like my poem?

I'm being disregarded, I guess I need to make myself noticed


so many directions, maybe I need to be more focused


I'm thankful for everything the world is gifting


at times I come to the surface, to go drifting


though, the Yellow Submarine, is closer to where I'm living


It's a trouble to lay my head to sleep,


from the pressures of being submerged, so deep


sometimes I just stay planted like a seed


never feeling love, not seeing what I sow, reaped

How do you like my poem?
Well, don't worry, Cleve. I've noticed you and so have many others. And what you've been sowing gives pleasure to many, so sleep untroubled.
Reply:One of the greatest deterrants to SELF regard, is over fertilizing the growth process,,, Not that you do.





Odd you mention "Yellow Submarine"; one of the most, NOW disregarded periods of recent History. I like to think of that time as "Inane".





I do not find your work as such however. Good on ya.





Steven Wolf


Just my two "Sense"
Reply:I like it, but I'm not sure it all flows.
Reply:To deep for me
Reply:I like it.


Keep it up, Nice work:)
Reply:always like ur poem..
Reply:Sorry, but I think it needs a little bit more improvement. I just can't feel the words.. :( Just an opinion
Reply:its sad- i hope its not true :(



White Teeth